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    dots Submission Name: My Writing Cornerdots
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    Author: duawrites
    Elite Ratio:    2.82 - 3/3/4
    Words: 107
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       I wrote this in my writing circle when I just didn't feel like writing. The irony.


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    dotsMy Writing Cornerdots
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    Today, I don’t feel like writing,
    I don’t feel like telling,
    or creating,

    I don’t feel like thinking.

    In all honesty,
    I don’t feel like existing.
    Not in the suicidal way

    But for today

    I want to -
    mesh with the wall,
    be one with the floor.

    Or, it could be a window, a shelf
    or just the knob on the door

    I just need
    to -
    unwind.
    to -
    let go

    There are days,
    I more than exist
    I give and I take

    But for today,
    on this night,
    at this time,

    I can only,
    just, be




    Submitted on 2014-03-11 08:38:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      A gigolo?
    | Posted on 2014-03-12 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]
      I think this was great,--simple, straightforward--no frills or fancy metaphors--just an honest sort os stream of consciousness happening




    I very much can relate

    to your feelings-------------------------------------------------

    --------I know I can--and SHOULD write something,
    BUT ,even though multiple prompts, ( both angels and demons) try to sway me------

    oft times I ----
    "I want to -
    mesh with the wall,
    be one with the floor.

    Or, it could be a window, a shelf
    or just the knob on the door

    I just need
    to -
    unwind.
    to -
    let go"



    I liked this--
    A LOT

    Thanks for submitting--
    Silver
    | Posted on 2014-03-12 00:00:00 | by Silverdog | [ Reply to This ]


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