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    dots Submission Name: Shaded. Honest. Warfare.dots

    Author: ForgottenGraves
    ASL Info:    20, Male
    Elite Ratio:    0.46 - 5/116/131
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       I don't really know how to describe this one, just kind of flowed out of my head so hate it if you want I actually like it.

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    dotsShaded. Honest. Warfare.dots

    You got to stop and turn.
    You can't just crash and burn.
    My power is like a spear.
    It isn't no sheep sheer.
    I can destroy you with a clap.
    So be careful for my trap.

    The darkness will overflow.
    This you will never know.
    My heart is showered with hate.
    So I will lure you in with my bait.

    I wish you a good battle.
    For we will both ride in on a saddle.
    My axe against you blade.
    Your light against my shade.

    Submitted on 2014-03-13 21:41:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Love it :)
    | Posted on 2014-03-14 00:00:00 | by Teofila | [ Reply to This ]
      You realize that this describes the very essence of insidiously sinister. I hate to sound caustically cryptic but It makes me feel a little bit like Luke Skywalker with his light saber. Perhaps this was your intent??? Maybe you have just cause for baiting these beings so that they will make a stand that you can point out the deficiencies of. Hum, the thought of such cynical. Your a bad one mister Grinch!!!

    | Posted on 2014-03-14 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]

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