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    dots Submission Name: Love, Ddots
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    Author: annie0888
    ASL Info:    49/f/LA
    Elite Ratio:    4.76 - 327/382/120
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotsLove, Ddots
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    Without D, you can't sign your name to your letters
    in college. It was clever, the implication of avid.
    Maybe it's a sign you're one to give up easily.
    No D.  It means I'm not part of your waltz
    no following steps, only the offbeats of
    my own thumpthump striving pulse.
    I go unfettered by the weighty D
    Without that letter you won't
    lurk in my history, lay on
    scars, broken bones nor
    immoveable vessels
    You sign your D
    one letter non
    -essentials
    thrown
    over
     







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    ||| Comments |||
      Have you read Ella Minnow Pea? It's a fun/sad book, and this reminded me of it.

    As far as the poem itself goes, I feel like the form works really well with the piece itself (I'm so sick of form poems that do nothing at all for the words). This comes on strong and fades out both in form and content. Like you're saying goodbye to D.

    "Avid" made me wonder--it's the only non-stand-alone D in the poem. It's also the only past-tense sentence in there. I'm not sure if that was intentional, but the fact that it's there made me think. Possibly too much.

    I like this very much.
    | Posted on 2014-12-02 00:00:00 | by etheror | [ Reply to This ]
      I love the way the words dwindled at the end. That was amazing.
    | Posted on 2014-03-15 00:00:00 | by Teofila | [ Reply to This ]


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