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Love, D

Author: annie0888
ASL Info:    49/f/LA
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Love, D

Without D, you can't sign your name to your letters
in college. It was clever, the implication of avid.
Maybe it's a sign you're one to give up easily.
No D.  It means I'm not part of your waltz
no following steps, only the offbeats of
my own thumpthump striving pulse.
I go unfettered by the weighty D
Without that letter you won't
lurk in my history, lay on
scars, broken bones nor
immoveable vessels
You sign your D
one letter non

Submitted on 2014-03-15 09:59:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Have you read Ella Minnow Pea? It's a fun/sad book, and this reminded me of it.

As far as the poem itself goes, I feel like the form works really well with the piece itself (I'm so sick of form poems that do nothing at all for the words). This comes on strong and fades out both in form and content. Like you're saying goodbye to D.

"Avid" made me wonder--it's the only non-stand-alone D in the poem. It's also the only past-tense sentence in there. I'm not sure if that was intentional, but the fact that it's there made me think. Possibly too much.

I like this very much.
| Posted on 2014-12-02 00:00:00 | by etheror | [ Reply to This ]
  I love the way the words dwindled at the end. That was amazing.
| Posted on 2014-03-15 00:00:00 | by Teofila | [ Reply to This ]

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