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    dots Submission Name: a la Neruda (ode to Neruda)dots
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    Author: She Is Insane
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    dotsa la Neruda (ode to Neruda)dots
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    I did not love him because he was the most handsome man,
                in the room.
    I loved him because he was the most beautiful person,
                I saw.
    His laughter traveled across the room, the same way bird's songs
    fly from branch to branch at dawn, booming majestically;
    echoing in my ears, the sound musically entrancing.
    I did not love him because he possessed any worldly things.
    I loved him because his heart carried a thousand pains.
    But his laughter cradled my tears now and then.
    His heart so heavily balanced between brittle bones
          but not breaking to heavy blows.
    I did not love him because he was someone with a plan.
    I loved him because his head was not screwed in right.
    His demons always dancing in his mind,
    and seeping into my dreamless sleep at night.
    I did not love him for I do not know how
    He was water and I was consumed by thirst one summer day.


    Mar 2014




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      Oh.! No.....why?beautiful words, perhaps there is one out there who might be thirsty for me, not so much so as to say.in as long as she believes like you have lived. Vlad 09
    | Posted on 2014-03-25 00:00:00 | by Damien Vladimir | [ Reply to This ]


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