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    dots Submission Name: Morning Commutedots
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    Author: CrypticBard
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    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/The pain inside
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    dotsMorning Commutedots
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    My feet throb through my shoes
    after a brisk walk to the station.
    I keep my ears plugged with my beats
    as I find my seat at the furtherest point.
    Backs of heads, napes, and collars
    mushroom and stare at me --
    my polarised sunnies paint them bright;
    Yet all I see is a tiny reflection of me.
    Here in my world another day begins.
    This cosmos is peopled isolation.




    Submitted on 2014-03-23 07:41:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Yeah, we're born alone, we die alone, and in between we often have to realize just how lonely it can be. Peopled isolation, nice turn of phrase.

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2014-03-23 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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