Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Morning Commutedots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: CrypticBard
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 368/381/226
    Words: 70
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/The pain inside
    Total Views: 927
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 424



    Description:
       


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsMorning Commutedots
    -------------------------------------------


    My feet throb through my shoes
    after a brisk walk to the station.
    I keep my ears plugged with my beats
    as I find my seat at the furtherest point.
    Backs of heads, napes, and collars
    mushroom and stare at me --
    my polarised sunnies paint them bright;
    Yet all I see is a tiny reflection of me.
    Here in my world another day begins.
    This cosmos is peopled isolation.




    Submitted on 2014-03-23 07:41:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      Yeah, we're born alone, we die alone, and in between we often have to realize just how lonely it can be. Peopled isolation, nice turn of phrase.

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2014-03-23 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    198823

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Wavelength written by saartha
    Bond written by saartha
    Munyonyo written by expiring_touch
    Be Free written by hybridsongwrite
    Giving written by jjd
    cleverly shunned written by CrypticBard
    To Glow written by krs3332003
    Love Can Be... written by HAVENSMITH92
    Life changes in a moment written by Ramneet
    It's Night Now written by RisingSon
    Pressure written by hybridsongwrite
    4th Season of Vivaldi written by HisNameIsNoMore
    It's been a while written by Sharati_hottie
    Unfortunate Reality written by TeslaKoyal
    Incubus written by monad
    In the end written by Janesaddiction
    Linger written by saartha
    A Sonnet for Nina written by SavedDragon
    Skin of Fables written by ShadowParadox
    To written by SavedDragon
    Sunset written by rev.jpfadeproof
    untitled written by Chelebel
    Ten Poems written by Wolfwatching
    Deaf Dumb and Blind is no excuse written by poetotoe
    Song written by Daniel Barlow
    Bee Keeper written by endlessgame23
    The Promise written by annie0888
    Date night written by expiring_touch
    Hopelessly Blind written by ForgottenGraves
    The Song on Your Guitar written by SavedDragon

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry