[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav

  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav

    << | >>

    dots Submission Name: Saydots

    Author: jeniecel
    ASL Info:    28/f/philippines
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 313/373/169
    Words: 83
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 894
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 528

       Random thoughts:)

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.


    Say my name
    Like a hurt
    When clouds rattle us with rain
    Under your sheltered bed
    When our lips almost touch
    I will press the air in between
    Lift it up the ceiling
    Where its white paint now wrinkled
    Reflects your far-off eyes

    Even if the pain runs up your throat
    And love is the ladder
    I will climb you
    Climb your long, soft skinned neck
    Press my lips to yours
    Make us humans once more

    Submitted on 2014-03-25 09:21:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!

    ||| Comments |||
      Critter, you are seriously appealing to my prurient instincts.

    | Posted on 2014-03-25 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]

    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?


    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    the living moment written by ShyOne
    More then just goodbye written by faideddarkness
    You do, I Do written by poetotoe
    Red Barn written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Push written by JanePlane
    Summer written by layDsayD
    Wavelength written by saartha
    written by Daniel Barlow
    Bond written by saartha
    Still Fighting See? written by ForgottenGraves
    Sleep Talk written by Queen_of_spades
    4th of July written by layDsayD
    cleverly shunned written by CrypticBard
    PEARL (Exclusive Poem) 10th Anniversary... written by Cordell
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (final) written by endlessgame23
    Primitive Lapse written by Crestfallenman
    Or are we written in the sand? written by Chelebel
    World I No Longer Want written by ForgottenGraves
    Cosmic Dreams written by Chelebel
    descent written by TheBadSadMan
    Physician, Heal Thyself written by WriteSomething
    Sunset written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Fasade written by jackz
    Neither Here nor There written by layDsayD
    It's Night Now written by RisingSon
    I will call out your name written by RisingSon
    Dashboard Light written by layDsayD
    What happens written by Wolfwatching
    Estranged / Shocks written by Daniel Barlow
    Every..... written by jackz




    User Name:


    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]

    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]

    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]