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    dots Submission Name: Saydots
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    Author: jeniecel
    ASL Info:    28/f/philippines
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 313/373/169
    Words: 83
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 1027
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       Random thoughts:)


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    dotsSaydots
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    Say my name
    Like a hurt
    When clouds rattle us with rain
    Under your sheltered bed
    When our lips almost touch
    I will press the air in between
    Lift it up the ceiling
    Where its white paint now wrinkled
    Reflects your far-off eyes

    Stay
    Even if the pain runs up your throat
    And love is the ladder
    I will climb you
    Climb your long, soft skinned neck
    Press my lips to yours
    Make us humans once more






    Submitted on 2014-03-25 09:21:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Critter, you are seriously appealing to my prurient instincts.

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2014-03-25 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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