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    dots Submission Name: Where you are goingdots
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    Author: Dead Bell
    ASL Info:    23/m/Ire
    Elite Ratio:    2.42 - 48/129/125
    Words: 195
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsWhere you are goingdots
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    Turn back toward the surf applauding
    Spume that floats like blurred white horses
    Sea-wide waves wait with sand in hand
    To rock and spin and spit you out alive
    And thankful though slaved to the cold kings
    Celestial sphere. He will not hide his steel blue light.
    But tonight he beams an old unblinking eye
    On a deep domain away and darker down

    Drive your car through the new spring mist
    Red eyes of angles go lighted through the fog
    And glide this unpaved drift of morning.
    But we of bones and skin are scattered
    Where no white god can see us now, cloaked and lonely,
    In the unbearable warmth of his benevolence.
    And although he searches by his hands
    We still elude his holy wave

    Run along each animal-eyed gaseous green
    By fawn and doe and hear the woods make music
    But do not follow down the fallow earth below
    Nor be enticed by floating airs
    That call you from the promenade
    To enter with the humanlike shadows
    And sing along the arborescent shades;
    With hand held out until the phantoms fade











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      I like the imagery and original lines. Although I find an overall thread throughout, I find it difficult to be specific on the theme except that it leaves an unease. Unease is good - nothing isn't.
    | Posted on 2014-04-01 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      This is some depth fully replete thinking on the mystic symbiosis' of metaphysical mystique and corporeally preternatural. I enjoyed this romp through the fecund fields of your virilities. I didn't really comprehend these things when I was your age.

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    | Posted on 2014-03-30 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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