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    dots Submission Name: Into The Backgrounddots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 167
    Class/Type: Rant/Longing
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       wrote this about everything I feel just a mixture of emotions


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    dotsInto The Backgrounddots
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    I ache to fade away
    Into the background of this crowd
    For which I go unseen for the most part anyhow
    I wish for an invisible cloak in which will grant me my deepest desire
    For all I am is an unwanted, unloved, empty shell of a person.

    A hollow person
    Thriving, breathing, living in darkness of pure and utter hate
    Hate for herself and those whom have wronged her in ways no will ever comprehend

    Left behind in the aftermath of my dysfunctional childhood
    I, and only I reap from the disadvantages of my solid life
    Left with night terrors only the devil himself can concoct

    This inferno of hatred only grows
    This great distain I carry with me daily, get heavier
    The shame I feel for the abuse I endured deepens with every passing moment

    Full of hatred I am.
    Nothing more,
    Nothing less,
    I ache to just fade away in the background of this empty life I lead....




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      I ache to rule the day
    to build a pillar of my life
    with lariats of magic fire
    circling the sun ten thousand times...

    Time to storm into the foreground.
    | Posted on 2014-04-19 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmm, I can appreciate a good dark piece of literature as much as the next melancholy wanderer, not to mention there is always something a little cryptic about having the first and last line of a poem repeat.

    On a more personal note I feel for you, however it is always pleasant to note that no matter how much chaos we have endured in our lives, the equilibrium is that we have a choice to reflect on the past, or to stay in the present. I strongly suggest you be more mindful of the smaller things in life, a first sip of coffee, the first taste of a chocolate bar, the rejuvenating feeling of relieving yourself from a hard day of work. Find something, and when you get there (no matter how long it takes) savor it like its your last moment on this planet, or even as a spirit in whole!
    | Posted on 2014-04-03 00:00:00 | by Zanitystar | [ Reply to This ]


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