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    dots Submission Name: Song of Frightdots
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    Author: helenastorm13
    Elite Ratio:    0.6 - 0/2/5
    Words: 23
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsSong of Frightdots
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    The night
    Loss of light.
    Lost the fight
    no more delight.
    Song of fright.
    Taking flight.
    Losing might.
    Lost the sight.
    Lost tonight.




    Submitted on 2014-04-04 17:41:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I love pieces that take advantage of very short lines. It's a piece that requires concentration to really follow but beautiful in that way. My only comment would be to consider "Loss of light" rather than "less of light", grammatically that sounds better.
    | Posted on 2014-04-12 00:00:00 | by duawrites | [ Reply to This ]

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