Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: I write this for youdots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: PrettyHeart
    ASL Info:    39
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 62/55/53
    Words: 173
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 689
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 951



    Description:
       


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsI write this for youdots
    -------------------------------------------


    I write this for you,

    Why, so many questions that never get answered.
    We circle around, if this is a we or us, just you and me.
    So frustrating to me... I don’t understand this, I cant just let it be.
    You and me are a common thought that is always unexpressed.
    Days can go by, even weeks that turn to months or years.
    When you decide to remember me my thoughts turn into tears.
    We talk about the past and dream of the future, if there is one.
    Always going back to the day it ended and you forget once again.
    You neglect to remember who let go of who, I wanted something of a fight.
    Nothing happened other than you fading out of my sight.
    Desire hesitates, wondering in my mind and embedded in my heart.
    Someday this will end and our journey will stop, with or without you.
    I write this for you, hopefully you will see it and remember what to do.




    Submitted on 2014-04-09 11:06:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      I like who this gives the vibe of you trying to remind yourself of why love is so great but so painful and then at the end, its really directed to that other person. Its like a sad reminder of something lost that shouldve never been.

    Anyway great job,
    Kase
    | Posted on 2014-04-18 00:00:00 | by kase | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    198869

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    (Untitled Song) written by TeslaKoyal
    FamiliarDemons ©™ written by kyserin
    Relentless. The Visceral Fracture. written by Daniel Barlow
    A Sense Of Things written by Daniel Barlow
    A bit of Pain written by teika5
    In a Corner written by jeniecel
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth written by endlessgame23
    Day 5 written by TheStillSilence
    Beauty Rest written by jackz
    Florida's Autumn Solstice written by closetpoet
    Coversheets written by TheStillSilence
    Across the bed written by expiring_touch
    Verse: written by Daniel Barlow
    Meaningless Meanings written by ForgottenGraves
    Day 6 written by TheStillSilence
    A Thousand Reflections written by endlessgame23
    Untitled written by Daniel Barlow
    Ciggarettes written by Poetic_tragedy6
    When Sirens Whisper written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Keep written by TheStillSilence
    Gaia written by endlessgame23
    None the Wiser written by endlessgame23
    Things They (Don't) Say written by TheStillSilence
    Live In Between written by teika5
    Snippet written by Daniel Barlow
    untitled written by Outlaw
    Not the Devil, but the Wind written by endlessgame23
    // Seasonal Song written by ShadowParadox
    A Worsening Effect written by Daniel Barlow
    Johnny's Cock written by endlessgame23

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry