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    dots Submission Name: I write this for youdots
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    Author: PrettyHeart
    ASL Info:    39
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 62/55/53
    Words: 173
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsI write this for youdots
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    I write this for you,

    Why, so many questions that never get answered.
    We circle around, if this is a we or us, just you and me.
    So frustrating to me... I don’t understand this, I cant just let it be.
    You and me are a common thought that is always unexpressed.
    Days can go by, even weeks that turn to months or years.
    When you decide to remember me my thoughts turn into tears.
    We talk about the past and dream of the future, if there is one.
    Always going back to the day it ended and you forget once again.
    You neglect to remember who let go of who, I wanted something of a fight.
    Nothing happened other than you fading out of my sight.
    Desire hesitates, wondering in my mind and embedded in my heart.
    Someday this will end and our journey will stop, with or without you.
    I write this for you, hopefully you will see it and remember what to do.




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    ||| Comments |||
      I like who this gives the vibe of you trying to remind yourself of why love is so great but so painful and then at the end, its really directed to that other person. Its like a sad reminder of something lost that shouldve never been.

    Anyway great job,
    Kase
    | Posted on 2014-04-18 00:00:00 | by kase | [ Reply to This ]


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