to me this piece was the dead truth. most people tend to think of me as a hopeless person, because i always see the sort end of things, but i like it better, thinking of things worse off than they are. this piece reminded me that you have to deal with things alone first. and then if someone else comes along to help, it's a big boost. but if you start out expecting help and then get no one, you're worse off then you were before. whoa sorry for the ramble. peace out.
Ouch! So sad. So filled with pain and sorrow and lose! Really Really Really great imagery, I could picture it all in my head. It makes me want to reach out to you and sooth your pain. I think of you as a good poet, but as a better friend. Even though I hardly know you. i just want to help in any way I can because I see so much potential in you. So much life, although you may not see it yourself. Broken
its sad to say the least. i'm not sure lust can ever be fulfilled, or that your words can never help, or that you have been forgotten. this is an excellent poem. i really really loved it, definently going in my favs.
This isn't like the regular depressing dark pieces that have been posted. This has pain in between the lines that can be felt when read. This is the type of dark writing I like. And it's hard to find good dark writing these days. Good job. --blt
darling... i like your blood INSIDE you... its a VERY VERY good look for you... im sorry your feeling so down and that stuff aint really working too well for you right now but dont lose hope... youve got a few years to go yet before you have to start worrying about being single for life... im sure you will find an amazing girlee but for now you just need to keep on keeping on and try to keep smiling no matter how bad this hurts... take care of you sir boy!
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