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    dots Submission Name: I Feel Like Wood.dots

    Author: MyPeriodical
    ASL Info:    18/m/pr
    Elite Ratio:    4.32 - 303/230/267
    Words: 150
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       nothing personal, just something random i whipped up off a character.

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    dotsI Feel Like Wood.dots

    a tree with no roots.

    my bones are chipping away like an old trunk
    and my veins have gone cold.

    am i of the desert or the forest? i can’t decide.
    i believe i belong to neither side.

    well, i feel quite dry
    a bit of rain would be just fine

    but at the same time, the sun is lacking these days

    no heat in the pit of my stomach
    just resting dust pooling at the bottom.

    i’m no vampire, but i bear no blood
    just rotting teeth and a fruitless tongue.

    i speak no more than i barely breathe
    thus the reason why my mouth is compared to an old floor-board;
    when i try to open up, it creaks.

    i tell myself no more,

    because no one needs to hear me.
    i am the old sofa in a grandfather’s library.

    Submitted on 2014-04-16 17:24:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i really appreciate this piece.

    your imagery is perfect. balanced and well worked.

    i especially like the floor board mouth that creaks insted of speaking... the way we stumble over our words when we're not used to getting them out. when we're not used to the opportunity to be listened to.

    and even though we readers dont know granfather or his library we all know the sofa or one just like it with the springs all unsprung and sticking into bottoms and yet there is a comfort in that sofa that cannot be explained... perhaps its just the knowledge that someone else has sat here and felt a lot like we are right now... someone else has known what it is like to be unstuck.

    im not sure im as excited about your title but thats okay...
    i would go for rotting teeth or a fruitless tongue... pull a striking title and a) people will read it and b) it will connect to the piece better.
    | Posted on 2014-04-20 00:00:00 | by allapo1ogies | [ Reply to This ]

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