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    dots Submission Name: womandots
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    Author: badliver
    Elite Ratio:    0.52 - 0/1/1
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotswomandots
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    their arms
    their legs, their hair
    their smell,
    the way they talk, the way they walk
    if you ask him he'll tell you the obvious
    True love is not seen with the eyes
    it is felt in your human inner core.
    it's that disgusting, gushing fucking feeling
    you get deep inside your gut, when she grabs you by the balls.
    you beg her to stay she wont.
    if you ask him he'll tell you the obvious.
    We all have it in us.




    Submitted on 2014-04-17 04:42:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think if you amp up the ugly, this will be even more uncomfortably satisfying than it already is. I like this piece, but I want it to make me more uncomfortable.
    | Posted on 2014-04-22 00:00:00 | by etheror | [ Reply to This ]


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