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    dots Submission Name: Echoesdots
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    Author: TheAirWeBreathe
    Elite Ratio:    2.64 - 5/16/19
    Words: 32
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/Legend
    Total Views: 863
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    Bytes: 245



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       ...I was bored so


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    dotsEchoesdots
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    Echoes.
    Echoes from.
    Echoes from voices.
    Echoes from voices long before.
    Each of these echoes.
    Echoes from voices.
    Has a story to tell.
    Echoes from.
    Sounds of a far off land?
    Echoes.




    Submitted on 2014-04-17 22:49:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      so i thought you were going somewhere completely different than you did. but we still met at the end on the same note. interesting how when we read things we expect them to go in different directions.

    im one of those people who goes to church and rewrites the vicars sermon as he is speaking though so dont mind me.

    perhaps i would play with some formatting to make the piece do totally what youve set out to achieve...


    Echoes.
    Echoes from.
    Echoes from voices.
    Echoes from voices long before.

    (Each of these echoes.)
    Echoes from voices.
    (Has a story to tell.)
    Echoes from.
    (Sounds of a far off land?)
    Echoes.

    im not sure whether ive nailed the formatting or not but the idea being that youve got the skeleton of the piece forming a palendrome of sorts with the whispers in italics filling it in... fleshing it out...

    im not sure about the second to last line though... the question seems out of place..?
    but you have created echoes throughout the piece and i really appreciate that.
    | Posted on 2014-04-20 00:00:00 | by allapo1ogies | [ Reply to This ]


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