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    dots Submission Name: Betrayaldots

    Author: keestu
    ASL Info:    32/male/Sydney
    Elite Ratio:    5.61 - 153/95/116
    Words: 295
    Class/Type: Poetry/Romance
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       Ten reasons of death
    1. Old age
    2. Wrath
    3. solitude
    4. Emptiness
    5. Despair
    6. Destruction
    7. Intoxication
    8. Insanity
    9. Greed
    10. Sacrifice

    The 11th reason by experience today ~ Betrayal

    (Blood moon - Lunar eclipse in 17-Apr-2014)

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    How does it feel my dear?
    Look; at how a knife cut's through an empty heart of pain.
    How does it feel to throw away a life?
    To not realize that you made a dry eye cry...

    To attain peace is where my heart dwells around,
    an unworthy hope which I have tried to destroy all my life.
    The moon turned red and the pain started all along,
    without knowing, did hope fake it's own life?

    All it left is more pain of which I intend to destroy the source,
    Oh! how kind of god to give several of them.
    A tiny speck of happiness, a small gift called freedom,
    when will I feel that life? when will that dream be alive?

    Not a word spoken back, not an emotion conceived,
    I know now why 'no' is unacceptable.
    Fear, a human emotion which I leave unscathed,
    Yet it tears me without a wound to be seen.

    I will not find you in the stars will I?
    Nor the moon shall come down to me as a gift from God.

    Know that I am human too.
    Know that this cold heart does melt.
    Know that behind that ugly mask is a child waiting to be loved.
    Know that you shall not cry in my arms till you finally close your eyes.
    Know that you shall not sleep without smiling once everyday.
    Know that it is not fear that I fear of.
    It is not living a moment of happiness before this life ends.

    How does it feel my dear?
    Look; at how that child in me is breathing through a tube called life.
    How does it feel to stab that child again?
    To not realize that I cry once again...

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      i cannot decide to whom you are writing this? by whom youve been betrayed...

    your description was very powerful... 10 reasons for death... the 11th... i think everyone can identify with.
    ironic (or maybe not) that you post this during Easter weekend. Judas... the ultimate betrayal...

    for glimpses throughout this piece i wonder whether this piece is aimed at a parent or significant adult who told you all kinds of stories you have found to not be true. i will not find you in the stars... do you speak of god? or a loved one who has passed?

    we are told all kinds of stories to comfort us as we are growing and going through all measure of experiences. sometimes well meaning loved ones tell us all kinds of rubbish instead of the truth because they want to protect us and yet when we learn the truth we find we are more hurt than we would have been had we learned it at first.

    anyway... i know my comment isnt even remotely helpful but that is my response to the words you have created.

    dont die.
    | Posted on 2014-04-20 00:00:00 | by allapo1ogies | [ Reply to This ]

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