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The commodity of fear


Author: Katrinagolden
ASL Info:    27/F/chicago
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The commodity of fear



The words have stopped flowing ages ago
The reigns of my imagination have been handed to someone else
While enjoying their words I have grown lax
My decomposing mind is unable to create new worlds
I find myself unable to express my emotions
Passions and feelings lie there, at the tip of my tongue
But unable to transcend
Unable to simply be
My world feels empty
Desolate and grey
The colors swirl in my mind, like a cord ready to be taken
I remain a coward, unwilling to tether myself to it
The commodity of safety is too precious a luxury I tell myself
If I am unable to fly, I remain unable to fall




Submitted on 2014-04-18 11:24:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  if this is the frustrated failings of love
and not the poet's fumbling for just the right word
then fear is the appropriate avatar
rather than frustration when the terms aren't clear
| Posted on 2014-04-19 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]


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