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    dots Submission Name: The Bagpipe Orchestradots
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    Author: MadGeologist
    Elite Ratio:    1.86 - 1/3/3
    Words: 187
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       This is my first attempt at free verse.


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    dotsThe Bagpipe Orchestradots
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    It begins as a low hum in the distance:
    The undulating, ululating scream of a young
    Repressed soul straining to give utterance,
    Musically, to the tumultuous passions brimming
    Inside him; or maybe simply the product of a
    Bored student expelling the frustrations of the day
    Into the mouthpiece of his instrument
    In a woeful, uninspired imitation of his teacher.
    Then suddenly, there are two, then three,
    Each playing just milliseconds
    Short of unison, and falling just short
    Of being in key. It's a wonder how their
    Musicality does not impose
    Itself on the pandemonium;
    Is it, after all, the instrument,
    Or is it the man, that makes sound music?
    A few more steps and the full intensity
    Of the depraved orchestra is exposed
    To the innocent ear: there are seven
    Cackling devils blowing hellfire
    Into the mouthpieces of their bagpipes,
    And each infernal strain is multiplied sevenfold
    To ring and beat within the heart
    And remind the mortal of his inevitable sins.
    Run and escape! The abhorrent sound
    Watches you rush down the staircase and out
    Of the building as you leave it behind to fade away.




    Submitted on 2014-04-19 07:06:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i like what youve got here.

    im not sure how i feel about bagpipes.
    sometimes i adore listening to them and yet others it feels like nails on a chalk board.

    i will never forget when i was younger i was staying with a Scottish couple over the summer when the husband came through to me white as a ghost asking me if he could hear bagpipes.

    i went outside and i could hear them very faint in the distance so i told him yes i could hear them.

    he was most worried that he was about to die. something about if you can hear bagpipes but cannot see them the scottish version of the grim reaper was coming for you...

    usually bagpipes give me goosebumps... i dont know if its good or bad...

    anyways. back on track.
    your use of bagpipes to convey your point is very poiwerful and not one ive seen before.
    i like their almost in time almost on key disharmony which you have painted well.

    i imagine it would be the sound if i was to pick up the bagpipes and try to make some kind of sound... theres a lot more skill to playing them than you would expect.

    your use of language and extensive vocab in this piece are is amazing.

    a very well thought through and presented piece.
    | Posted on 2014-04-19 00:00:00 | by allapo1ogies | [ Reply to This ]


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