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    dots Submission Name: Okaydots
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    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 119
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    The moon abides in furious white
    I pass out in the cold thin air
    I float towards the light

    I wake in mourning
    And death
    Is not what I fear
    Pasty as a potato
    Mashed on a plate
    My complexion
    Is is a reflection
    Of an hour that ran too late

    Light filtered through water
    A luminescent corral laden sea
    I see Nemo
    I see you

    You are a tousled part
    Of sleep's inception
    The beginning of
    An adventure
    like one of Alice where she is
    As tall
    as she is small
    And everything
    And nothing at all
    Is impossible ;-)









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      Time to reanimate from the cold thin air, wipe the mashed potato from your chin and pick up your pen :)
    | Posted on 2014-09-18 00:00:00 | by ponykeeper | [ Reply to This ]
      Some beautiful things here.
    | Posted on 2014-04-22 00:00:00 | by etheror | [ Reply to This ]
      We're all mad here... ;)
    | Posted on 2014-04-22 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      "Yes you'll find your anything right on top when you open your nothing." And although this doesn't perhaps amount to the everything, I of it represents by me of the essence of totality. I think!!

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2014-04-22 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]
      I think being dead is a lot like the end of the poem... as tall as you are small... a lot like Alice in the Rabbit Hole. I hope nothing is impossible... Because I plan to stick around long after I die :)
    | Posted on 2014-04-19 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]


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