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    dots Submission Name: Many Ways to Make a Halodots

    Author: hyproglo
    Elite Ratio:    4 - 180/258/153
    Words: 98
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsMany Ways to Make a Halodots

    We all get away with imagining things
    Hope that the best will fill in the seams

    Walked to places where you did not follow
    Never felt alone but did feel...


    After time, after nourishment, afterthought

    "The levels just appeared

    Never had to step up to them"

    As you can see
    The sun caresses me
    Just as sweetly on mine

    Is not that a mark of the divine?

    Rain and sunshine makes a rainbow
    Dark and light makes a shadow
    Yet there are many ways to make a halo

    Submitted on 2014-04-19 23:01:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Brilliant, bravo, applause...
    I have to say this was just perfect for me. I can relate. This was so artfully written.

    After time, after nourishment, afterthought
    Beautiful progression!

    And the levels went up without you reaching for them, natural progression, gracefully told. This was really very unique and beautiful.
    | Posted on 2015-04-28 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      I very much enjoyed your last three lines and thought they would make a fine poem by themselves, but on the whole its good, nice phrasing and wordlplay, plus line-breaks add to it the way you have them.
    | Posted on 2014-04-23 00:00:00 | by Wolfwatching | [ Reply to This ]
      Really nice poem. I enjoyed this and all it conjured. And it's very true... lots of ways.
    | Posted on 2014-04-20 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]
      indeed there are many ways to make a halo; many ways to atone for sins of days gone by; many ways to rewrite the past and yet...

    this piece is beautiful. sad and longing but beautiful.
    i adore that the sun shines on you just where you are... that youre not all doom and gloom because you have not "measured up"

    I walked to places where you did not follow
    Never felt alone but I did feel...


    After time, after nourishment, afterthought

    your line breaks are exquisite! seriously. the heaviness of SOMETHING... such a loaded word. and unexpected.

    sometimes we cross paths with people who deeply impact our lives and then we walk together for a while and then our paths branch off and everyone responds to this differently.
    some grieve. others get angry. you seem content in the choices you have been made and the cards you have been dealt which really is a wonderful thing.

    so i know im not making much sense but i really like this piece. a master craftsman of words if i ever i saw one.

    thank you.
    | Posted on 2014-04-20 00:00:00 | by allapo1ogies | [ Reply to This ]

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