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    dots Submission Name: Abyss Of Immortalitydots
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    Author: poet09
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 157/162/122
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Poetry/Broken
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    dotsAbyss Of Immortalitydots
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    Shadows consume slowly the guiding lights
    many days turn to sleepless nights
    Time never ceases all the pain
    under the moon this crimson rain

    Broken and torn the flame starts
    setting ablaze a frozen heart
    Things always change its never enough
    time still moves when its rough

    Dreams of life at death's door
    the bitterness it'll always adore
    Escape the mind drown its soul
    in despairs company a bottomless hole

    An empty vessel bloods all around
    spotted blurry vision losing its ground
    Beat by beat a last breath
    soft spoken words of a meaningless death.......




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