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    dots Submission Name: Struggles Withindots

    Author: poet09
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 157/162/122
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsStruggles Withindots

    Piece by piece being let down
    as it begins to drown
    Holding on as fate turns
    from the past it still burns

    Open the mind steal its pain
    for a time of personal gain
    Losing the clarity of whats right
    at the horizon of summer's night

    Fragments of life scattered by day
    as the poison has it way
    A losing battle tears set in
    despair once again has this win

    An enemy's friend within oneself
    the blade shines above the shelf
    It will never be found
    as the blood flows on the ground

    Submitted on 2014-04-27 09:07:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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