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    dots Submission Name: Sun, Moon & Brightest Stardots
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    Author: Rainin_Raspbery
    ASL Info:    22/F/Edmonton/AB/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.45 - 145/140/109
    Words: 236
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsSun, Moon & Brightest Stardots
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    The greatest gift,
    I've ever been given to me,
    Would be you,
    You hold me together,
    Like glue,
    I'm adoring each and every piece,
    Sometimes it feels,
    Like I can't resist,
    Like a thirst that is,
    Never fully quenched.

    Everything about you,
    Draws me in,
    Head to toe,
    I love how your nobodies foe,
    How you dive -- right in,
    Not afraid to loose,
    All with that smirk,
    That of course -- drives me berserk.

    Your hair and the way you avoidingly you stare,
    Your nose and toes,
    Your freckles -- everywhere,
    Those eyes,
    Oh my,
    The hands and the thighs,
    Both laying loosely upon mine,
    Those tiny hips and luscious lips,
    Everything about you is fine,
    Your simply divine.

    As I said,
    And i'll say it again,
    I like you,
    For who you are,
    To me,
    You shine like a -- star,
    I really wouldn't change anything about you,
    Not a hair on that pretty head.

    To top it all off,
    You inspire me,
    Making me want to do better,
    Supporting me to do,
    And face any weather,
    Reminding me,
    Deep down how capable,
    And that every situation is plyable,
    Owing your inner strength,
    Admitting when you've lost faith,
    Your power lies in who you are,
    Don't ever change,
    Forever -- You'll always be my babe,
    Cause I appreciate,
    All that you are,
    My sun, moon and brightest star.




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