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    dots Submission Name: Springdots
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    Author: expiring_touch
    ASL Info:    30/f/Hamburg
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 137/243/158
    Words: 85
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsSpringdots
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    This part of Hamburg looks and feels Siberian
    retracing chubby childish fingers
    along the footnote creased in exile.
    The air has intake and a bit of spring
    that sends the leafy shadows quivering
    against the patchy asphalt.
    The scent of apple trees in bloom
    is hanging like a green halo and caught
    between my high-strung ankles –
    For I am overturned this spring,
    watching this dusk descending
    down my hair – its very ends
    I tied to ancient bells in bronze,
    announcing summer’s
    coming.




    Submitted on 2014-05-01 15:27:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was simply lovely... the ending especially so. Overturned... dusk descending down my hair, ancient bells... I wish I were so excited for spring.
    | Posted on 2014-05-07 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]


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