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    dots Submission Name: Phonecalldots
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    Author: MysterydarkPoet
    ASL Info:    20/f/Aust
    Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 157/295/173
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsPhonecalldots
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    Frail & nimble my fingers reach for the phone
    It's winter but there are no blankets to warm me from this cold

    You answer my call,
    But I choke.
    The cord has wound its way around my neck
    forming a noose for my throat.
    We've done this dance before.

    Did I ever stutter so much to begin with?
    Were you always this intimidating to talk to?

    My tears are falling as you echo a hello,
    but there's not enough courage I can muster
    to kill this one way conversation

    The line clicks.
    The hum sends a weight through my bones.
    My eyes close.
    "Hello."




    Submitted on 2014-05-04 03:05:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like it a lot it really proves how as we grow those we were most close to can sometimes can become complete strangers to us.
    | Posted on 2014-05-08 00:00:00 | by blackdemigod13 | [ Reply to This ]


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