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    dots Submission Name: The Looking Glassdots
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    Author: SavedDragon
    Elite Ratio:    3.61 - 303/258/84
    Words: 180
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsThe Looking Glassdots
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    I stare into her eyes
    Knowing the strife which was before
    She sings to me her favorite lullaby
    From the songs of times passed
    Oh, how her smile I adore

    Her eyes, everything to me
    The windows to her soul
    The glisten of tears about to form
    Would never fall
    I’d take my hand to wipe her cheeks

    I’d dive into the deepest trench
    To find the reason for her pain
    I’d run through daisy filled prairies
    To find the meaning of her glory
    If only I could I would do it for her

    I’d stand for her bravest wish
    And fall for her weakest moment
    Like a vessel that contains her
    Her insecurity, her pride

    I’d raise my gentle palm to hers
    If only to feel her warmth
    But when I smile, she smiles
    And reflects my same actions

    She could break me
    Shatter my existence, crumble down
    Be the reason for my destruction
    Like the broken pieces of glass
    And yet still never understand
    That her fragility is mine too




    Submitted on 2014-05-09 05:39:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Sure, no problem. Thanks for reading!
    | Posted on 2014-06-04 00:00:00 | by SavedDragon | [ Reply to This ]
      Mind if I mess with this a little and make song? I have another poem-lyric-song on my list and was wondering if you would mind. I would credit you, of course!!
    Thank you in advance for your consideration!
    (My PM Is not currently working for me, sorry!)
    | Posted on 2014-06-02 00:00:00 | by TheAirWeBreathe | [ Reply to This ]
      Thank you for your feedback!
    | Posted on 2014-05-14 00:00:00 | by SavedDragon | [ Reply to This ]
      This was great. Too many lines that i thought were amazing so im not going to write them. Just know this was awesome. Definitely a poem a girl would love to have been an inspiration for
    | Posted on 2014-05-12 00:00:00 | by kase | [ Reply to This ]


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