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    dots Submission Name: Unkind Kinddots
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    Author: lolaxelmo
    ASL Info:    23/F/IA
    Elite Ratio:    2.96 - 34/37/38
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsUnkind Kinddots
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    I write on reverses of attendance forms
    given to me -- the sighing secretary,
    dreading her job shrouds it in warped gossip,
    told in hushed tones, suggestive
    of not retelling.
    surrounded and lost within youth
    sacrificed life given to serve,
    one reigns alcohol as restitution--
    calls after hours, bottles deep
    in cabernet and pinot noir,
    justified in the French connection
    a shared subject taught between
    informer and observer of how
    the Word shifts in the drunken
    accusations of the justifier--
    double lives lead to different sides
    while repeating the same image mirrored.




    Submitted on 2014-05-10 13:31:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
       I see accurately depicted scenarios. This poem captures the true heart and soul of what my favorite poems should be.
    You can enjoy mental visuals, and the vagueness leaves openings for interpretation.
    Thank you so much for this poem.
    | Posted on 2014-05-13 00:00:00 | by TheAirWeBreathe | [ Reply to This ]
      I dont know how to critique this but i can definitely say i am impressed. Thx for the great read
    | Posted on 2014-05-12 00:00:00 | by kase | [ Reply to This ]


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