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    dots Submission Name: The Shoulder I've Longeddots
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    Author: Crestfallenman
    ASL Info:    24/M/CA
    Elite Ratio:    4.45 - 621/961/451
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsThe Shoulder I've Longeddots
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    Nightfall,
    The day rests...
    But the silence surrounding wakes me,
    Alone with the turmoils that rest deep within me.

    I wish you knew...

    Somehow I'm in this disposition,
    In loss by the harsh climates of love.

    I'm hurting,
    I know I'm supposed to feel this.

    I just wish you knew...

    How hard it is,
    To live without you...

    My reason is fading,
    My tears still flowing...
    I don't know how to resolve this...

    I don't know how to solve it...

    I need you...
    But how can I enjoy that sentiment?

    I wish you knew...

    How much I loved you.




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    ||| Comments |||
      Nice form here. Message is strong but not over the top, seems solid. Good to read you again, I've been drifting about busy, busy, busy. Still can't play a lick but hopeful before I die that I will lay down a few. Time seems to go faster the longer you swim in it.

    Since the site asks me to suggest something...

    I wish you knew... how much I loved you.

    Lloyd
    | Posted on 2014-05-12 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, this struck a cord. I have no great words of wisdom or critique. Just a nod of relation and a heartfelt ovation.

    "But the silence surrounding wakes me"

    Love that!

    One snip it...the second me in the first stanza...needed?

    Thanks for sharing
    Peace
    | Posted on 2014-05-12 00:00:00 | by clay | [ Reply to This ]


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