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    dots Submission Name: Jacobin Paranoiadots
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    Author: CrypticBard
    Elite Ratio:    3.55 - 368/381/224
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Poetry/What you did
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    dotsJacobin Paranoiadots
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    `

    warmth envelops,
    dissolving the
    bustle and noise:
    liquid stillness
    offers but a momentary
    tranquil once-upon-a-time;
    it is so easy to
    drift off and forget

    here, the watery balm
    soothes celiac rashes,
    a moment's reprieve
    that shuts out reality,
    provides sombre retreat...
    cares float away
    until unwanted thoughts
    stray with blistered report.

    It is quite possible,
    through bolted locks,
    to be a victim
    of home invasion,
    for someone to play
    Corday to one's Marat--
    a hapless victim, stabbed
    at home, in one's bath.



    `




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      You say you worry that beings with clairaudience can see you right through your walls, or perhaps even kill you right through them. I paranoid schizophrenic empathize. I don't appear to be alone either.

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2014-05-14 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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