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Jacobin Paranoia


Author: CrypticBard
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Class/Type: Poetry /What you did
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Jacobin Paranoia



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warmth envelops,
dissolving the
bustle and noise:
liquid stillness
offers but a momentary
tranquil once-upon-a-time;
it is so easy to
drift off and forget

here, the watery balm
soothes celiac rashes,
a moment's reprieve
that shuts out reality,
provides sombre retreat...
cares float away
until unwanted thoughts
stray with blistered report.

It is quite possible,
through bolted locks,
to be a victim
of home invasion,
for someone to play
Corday to one's Marat--
a hapless victim, stabbed
at home, in one's bath.



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Submitted on 2014-05-13 04:19:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  You say you worry that beings with clairaudience can see you right through your walls, or perhaps even kill you right through them. I paranoid schizophrenic empathize. I don't appear to be alone either.

Bruce
| Posted on 2014-05-14 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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