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    dots Submission Name: Halls of Greendots
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    Author: dancer-of-words
    ASL Info:    21/trans/US
    Elite Ratio:    4.6 - 167/158/74
    Words: 247
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
    Total Views: 750
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    Description:
       the experiencing of being in a deep forest


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    dotsHalls of Greendots
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    The gray sky scarce peeps through the ceiling of green
    twixt the trunks and the leaves little else can be seen
    through the treetops is heard the soft call of the lark
    in the shadows of branches, reposing and dark;
    where the morning doves coo and the cardinal calls
    and I lie here, quite safe in my great green halls.

    The shadows are dark and the darkness is deep
    the kind of dark green that could lull you to sleep
    but not quite so dark that the sunlight can't reach
    or the air cannot come or the silence can breach.

    The shape-shifting sunlight shines down on a scene
    where the damp breeze is cool and the air is serene;
    where all life is verdant and not a leaf falls
    and I'm tranquil indeed in my great green halls.

    The rooftops and pillars are green and dark brown
    and I'm far, far away from the bustle of town
    while I'm lost in my thoughts and in musings nonential
    in a green golden air that is somehow reverential.
    The lush grass my carpet, the forest my walls
    I shall lie here in peace in my great green halls.

    In the dusk, let me rest in my halls of the west
    where the sun rises gold and the bee makes its nest
    in a forest I own in a hall where I'm queen
    let me lie here forever in my great halls of green.




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    ||| Comments |||
      Very nice. Any time you can use "twixt" you have a leg up in my boat.

    Extra bonus points for all the rhyming. It seems a somewhat lost art but there's always a certain magic in it.

    Lloyd
    | Posted on 2014-05-16 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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