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    dots Submission Name: Falling In Lovedots

    Author: Teofila
    ASL Info:    17, F, with the wolves
    Elite Ratio:    0.48 - 210/102/70
    Words: 56
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 702
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       Another that I found in a notebook of mine

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    dotsFalling In Lovedots

    My love for you
    Is like the deepest abyss
    And as time goes on
    My love grows strong
    But I'm still falling
    In love with you
    With each day new
    And so now I Promise
    Only to you
    My love will never stray
    For I love you
    More and more
    With each passing day...

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      This is a very nice poem. I was in love once, so I know the feelings and emotions. Whatever very good writing keep it up.. :)
    | Posted on 2015-01-19 00:00:00 | by Thenocturnal | [ Reply to This ]
      Good one! This puts falling in love in its simplest form.
    | Posted on 2015-01-04 00:00:00 | by D-Ink | [ Reply to This ]
      I know the feeling. Its great when you can find someone that you can love more and more every single day. I'm a fan of nicely flowing pieces and this surely is one of them.

    | Posted on 2014-06-01 00:00:00 | by ineedmorecoffee | [ Reply to This ]
      Uhm ^ they said everything i was going to, this is by far one of my faves of all your writes. Great job T.

    | Posted on 2014-05-26 00:00:00 | by kase | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a very sweet lyric poem. You are expressing your feelings and your current state of mind very succinctly.

    I like the line:
    Is like the deepest abyss

    Ah . . . that feeling of endless passion, warmth, vulnerability . . .

    I like that you played on that image later in the poem with the lines:
    I'm still falling
    In love with you
    With each day new

    This is tricky though, since the word "abyss" often has a negative association for people (as in the depths of hell etc.).

    You were clever to try and counter that with the lines about your love growing strong.

    You might want to make a whole separate verse with that second image of it like a flower or a tree or a child . . . something that (usually) grows stronger with time.

    At any rate, I love the raw emotion and the way you have put yourself out there with your words.

    | Posted on 2014-05-17 00:00:00 | by JanePlane | [ Reply to This ]

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