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    dots Submission Name: From Brain. To Heart.dots
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    Author: ForgottenGraves
    ASL Info:    20, Male
    Elite Ratio:    0.47 - 5/117/132
    Words: 58
    Class/Type: Misc/Serious
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    dotsFrom Brain. To Heart.dots
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    Stop..
    Just give up..
    Its better for you..
    You know that..
    But you wont will you..
    You never listen to me..
    Live your fantasy..
    Then see what happens..
    See what always happens..
    You get burnt don't you?
    You get hurt and blame the world..
    Well its your fault.
    Just give up..
    Stop..
    Please..
    You're dragging me into this...




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    ||| Comments |||
      
    I like the transverse of dragging the brain into a heart matter instead of the proverbial dragging the heart around (great tune!).
    It is a straight forward description of knowing better but diving in anyway.
    Love is blind
    deaf and dumb all rolled in one.

    You have your truth here and although I understand it and think the same way at times, I love falling in love...all the gush and swept up and holy crap this feels like...well you get the gist.
    I'm a fricken sucker for that shit.
    I just can't hold onto to it.

    The only thing I didn't care for here was the extra use of periods.
    I do the same thing with threes...but there seems to be an abundance of them...threw me off a bit.

    Anyhoo, my two cents and now I'm broke
    Thanks for sharing

    Peace
    | Posted on 2014-05-16 00:00:00 | by clay | [ Reply to This ]
      I think I intellectuality agree, although an obnoxious form of obstinateness can definitely get it on the adamant tenacity the copacetic diligence it didn't amount to. Conversely "just give up" doesn't get it by me either!! In it's hard to get out of the fact that we naturally drag ourselves into these things.

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2014-05-15 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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