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    dots Submission Name: Valentinedots
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    Author: JanePlane
    ASL Info:    125/F/everyplane
    Elite Ratio:    6.76 - 415/433/130
    Words: 57
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsValentinedots
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    full lips touch my neck, my breasts
    and heat is exchanged--
    dark and damp and vibrating with energy:
    heat

    skin slick and smooth
    pushes past;
    moves through
    and breathes
    inside me

    this is the magnificence of the rain.
    this is the sun shining again.
    this is

    better than chocolate.




    Submitted on 2014-05-16 22:12:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      My son was born on Valentines day, this puts me in mind of conception and delivery. I'm thinking that's not entirely the pic but I definitely enjoyed your words and your smile and the intimacy of this.
    | Posted on 2015-09-17 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      Well Jane this made me think of lesbianism because as guys i dont think we are aware we can have full lips - just that weve got them. Then theres the vibrating...

    I think you are closer to an actual poem than it would appear on the page because, in a simple way, you're kind of talking about osmosis and theres a charm about that.

    I want to say

    This is omnipresence
    This is the magnificence of rain...

    And depending on your mood you could have a real fireball
    Or keep the bit about chocolate: )

    Nice to read you again.
    | Posted on 2014-05-20 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]
      yes mam it is. i much prefer reading this to eating a chocolate any day.
    | Posted on 2014-05-20 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]
      Wonderfully erotic. Works on the personal as well as the cosmic and ends in fun in the last line. - Jim
    | Posted on 2014-05-20 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      You depend on sexual fidelity for these emotions? Strange as it might celibate monk seem of this is not pragmatically practical. I'm just platonic proxy kidding, in this practically reached out to grab me………you sexy thing!

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2014-05-17 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]
      
    Yes!

    skin slick and smooth
    pushes past;
    moves through
    and breathes


    Incredibly exotic and so fulfilling of all the senses it just screams climax!

    Wickedly done

    this is the magnificent rain
    this is the sun shining again
    this is

    better then chocolate


    I want to use an expletive here but would not want to offend as this is just fricken down right perfect!
    Seriously!
    I'm speechless
    | Posted on 2014-05-16 00:00:00 | by clay | [ Reply to This ]


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