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    dots Submission Name: Silence dots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 153
    Class/Type: Fanfic/Serious
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    dotsSilence dots
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    The silence is deafening

    I can hear the constant rotation of the tires smacking the pavement
    The never-ending clicking of you turning off and on your brights
    Doing your best to be respectful of other drivers
    Yet, not with your daughter
    Suggesting all people cannot handle honesty
    stating "this is what I get for being honest"
    As if I am just another "person" in your life
    Its not honesty I cannot handle
    Its the abruptness the crudeness and repetitiveness you spoke with
    When speaking this new found honesty

    The silence is deafening

    Now I am upset you say
    Now I am about to cry you comment
    As if "how dare I"?!?

    No, no I will not cry!
    I feel nothing
    I hurt no where

    Just to prove you wrong
    I will not sob
    I will not whimper

    The silence is deafening




    Submitted on 2014-05-18 21:47:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is about my favourite thing i have read on here for a long time. I admire the way it is constructed - allowing you to get at and get out what you need to get out. I cant claim to have read a lot of your work but from time to time i read you and i am glad i guess because you have figured out a way to speak.

    The ever-presence of tension is unrelenting and brought by you in levels ....not really levels, just that its like we were walking and then from out of nowhere theres an iron fence barring the way- we change direction - that same iron fence. There is no escape and thats super thats awesome that little bit of leg room just to trap us again, so when i say theres admiration....

    Thank you for sharing your plight/the availability of your work.

    DB
    | Posted on 2014-05-20 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]
      Yes it is. Screaming at the top of your lungs can't even compare can it.

    bit of a typo

    of to off in the second line.

    although heart wrenchingly somber, i liked this.

    | Posted on 2014-05-19 00:00:00 | by clay | [ Reply to This ]


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