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    dots Submission Name: Untitleddots

    Author: jeniecel
    ASL Info:    28/f/philippines
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 313/373/169
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 984
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       Forgive my random thoughts..

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    So you think
    among the shades of countless trees
    a bird sings
    or perhaps it does
    with pride coming from its lungs
    up to the throat
    then outside it's being
    along with the wind the earth
    carries it's noise
    with dignity cloaked underneath the blue sky
    not heard by the distant city
    not among its confusing streets
    towering lampposts
    nor a stranger in a coffee shop
    hands on a plastic glass
    lips on the rim
    pretends it's coffee on it
    was it something else then?
    a society?
    or perhaps a release of self
    wanting to speak a language
    hidden among writers
    or song
    which tasted of creamer and sugar

    Submitted on 2014-05-19 08:36:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I found this very comforting, although i saw a spiraling evolution from the bird's musical singing to a persons coffee in hand, sitting inthe concrete jungle of a city without any nature. Very pleasant read though. Great job

    | Posted on 2014-05-26 00:00:00 | by kase | [ Reply to This ]
      or perhaps a release of self
    wanting to speak a language
    hidden among writers
    or song
    which tasted of creamer and sugar

    This was just amazing to read, first coffee in hand and cypher in and out through the lines, absorbing very word/thought along the way down.
    Thank you, I enjoyed this. I would but a whole jargon here on what I felt or images it did expose within but with this one I prefer to say:

    Forgive my random thoughts...
    Hmmm....I praise them!

    | Posted on 2014-05-19 00:00:00 | by clay | [ Reply to This ]

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