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    dots Submission Name: In Memoriamdots
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    Author: Runes
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    dotsIn Memoriamdots
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    This will be the only poem I give you,
    because I won't think of you anymore
    when you finally leave this last time

    (I barely think of you now)

    But I know you want to be missed. I know
    you want to make some impression on me
    that leaves a hollow spot that belongs
    only to you...

    (I'll say, what was his name?)

    It will be the shrimp you fed me that night
    from your salad, and the honest conversation
    when you avoided eye contact while telling me
    everything I needed to know on surviving
    without letting someone get too close...

    It will be the soft blue of your irises, like
    the restless sea waters of Kwajalein Atoll.

    I will put you here, in this one little poem,
    because I know you want to be missed
    and remembered, but I will forget

    (I barely think of you now)




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      you know, the last thing i truly wrote was: with all sincerity.

    and i meant it.

    i think anymore it's not the men i miss, but the idea of one.

    i was thinking 'bout him the other day... one of our last conversations... he had the balls to call me a victim.

    i'm like victim this motherfucker.

    like really???

    that was so 18 year old ago.
    and now i'm 45 and know a whole lot more!
    cya.


    to fresh starts.

    and wordlessness.


    | Posted on 2014-06-03 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]
      You've said quite a lot but this must be one of those unreliable narrator situations, because I feel as if all of this was said aloud from behind a well-made one-way mirror, reflecting only this sparsely thought of person, never revealing a crumb of true feeling. Cold. And not the kind of Klingon revenge dish that makes me want to cheer. This makes me grateful for the messy breakups in my life, strangely. I'm older now, which is why I perhaps realize it takes two separate trajectories to throw a ship off course.
    | Posted on 2014-05-24 00:00:00 | by blueorchids | [ Reply to This ]
      i love how balanced and straightforward you are with this. the passions still there. but the fire don't seem as scorching. resolve is a good thing.
    | Posted on 2014-05-23 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]
      
    For some reason I want to say amen
    Which isn't like me but seems somewhat fitting.

    How simply marvelous it would be, place it all into one beautifully embodied memorial. Momentum of proof, signed sealed and tucked away. Left where it should be in the past...yes that would be lovely.

    I like this, as always

    Moi

    | Posted on 2014-05-22 00:00:00 | by clay | [ Reply to This ]


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