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My Stupidity


Author: Teofila
ASL Info:    17, F, with the wolves
Elite Ratio:    0.4 - 210 /104 /71
Words: 87
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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just a description of an embarrassing moment of mine lol


My Stupidity



Remember the other night
when you just randomly stopped by?
You bent down and kissed me
just like every other time?
Well this time it was different
Though I'm still not quite sure how.
I wasn't even thinking
but oh the things I could say now!
When your lips left mine,
everything looked new.
Then wow, oh stupid me,
I said "I love you".
I should have kept my mouth shut.
I shouldn't have said a word.
And now I'm still not sure
if you even heard...




Submitted on 2014-05-23 15:07:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is still my fave <3
| Posted on 2014-12-22 00:00:00 | by kase | [ Reply to This ]
  Oh man, I can definitely relate to this one!
Thank you for sharing, I don't feel like the only awkward one now!
I enjoyed how true to the emotions this one was, reminds me of the good ole days.

Cheers
| Posted on 2014-06-01 00:00:00 | by ineedmorecoffee | [ Reply to This ]
  aww that's soo sweet. very genuine. well if you know you feel that way then say it louder maybe. it might hurt if he doesn't and he just might not know. young love, especially for boys, is difficult to pick out.
| Posted on 2014-05-31 00:00:00 | by RyanJoseph | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow taylor, this was amazing. Soo raw, and full of pain. It was perfect. Im sorry for whatever happened to have made you wrte this piece, but for what its worth, i think its the best thing ive ever read from you. Great job. Totally a fave


Kase
| Posted on 2014-05-26 00:00:00 | by kase | [ Reply to This ]
  At first I was expecting a funny ending, but that feeling is never humorous. I think everyone has went through this at least once. Enjoyable write!

</3 Lisa
| Posted on 2014-05-26 00:00:00 | by 777sacrites777 | [ Reply to This ]


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