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    dots Submission Name: OLD SOLDIER NEVER DIESdots
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    Author: pensaint
    Elite Ratio:    4.06 - 2/2/2
    Words: 244
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsOLD SOLDIER NEVER DIESdots
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    ‘’Burry me with her scarf and a flag,’’
    Those words were his last,
    He lived only in these brag,
    But he brought peace and made it last,

    When thieves and robbers came and guns were shot,
    We all ran into hiding,
    But old soldier ran out chasing madly,
    This man was a lot

    Should you find yourself in danger?
    With the under men at hand
    Just scream old soldier
    and papa onome will take the stand

    He was fighting in the war
    When on the delivery bed his wife died
    He returned with the rejoicing and all
    He got into his house and cried,

    Sometimes he will scream randomly
    His sanity was falling fast
    He was feared yet he was brotherly
    When he told stories of the past

    Stories of war fought in
    And deeds he had done
    He told us nothing of his hurting,
    And why he never stopped to mourn

    He once said he was empty
    Staring up to the skies
    He once said this world is empty,
    If the dead cannot return to life

    He battled with life till he was 80,
    He lived to see onome grow,
    The girl was full of beauty,
    But she was a no go as you must know,

    He was just a common soldier,
    His rank and pension were thin
    Till his last breath,old soldier
    Brought peace and with it everything.


    EGHAREVBA TERRY{THE PENSAINT}




    Submitted on 2014-05-25 18:22:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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