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    dots Submission Name: The Freedom Illusiondots
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    Author: dancer-of-words
    ASL Info:    21/trans/US
    Elite Ratio:    4.6 - 167/158/74
    Words: 175
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsThe Freedom Illusiondots
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    One night I sat in pain alone
    and heard a small voice say
    that I could go to worlds unknown
    and make pain go away

    It said I’d softly slip away
    into a golden mist
    that death was everlasting sleep
    in speech that softly hissed.

    And death was like a mist wherein
    I’d softly slip away
    I’d say I first by Death was kissed
    and borne into the gray.

    I wished my painful life away
    I longed for no more breath
    yet heeded not the voice that said
    that I’d find rest in death.

    That voice may come to you one night
    when you are all alone
    and bid you cease the weary fight
    and let your pain be done.

    There is no rest in death my friend
    nor solace in the grave
    each death will leave a heart to mend
    for life is for the brave

    Nor is there any comfort in
    the crematorium shelf
    the only ones death takes to rest
    are those he takes himself.




    Submitted on 2014-05-26 19:47:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Very well put. I must admit, got me thinking yet helped me clear my head.
    | Posted on 2014-12-11 00:00:00 | by Depression420 | [ Reply to This ]
      and so the bitter and the sweet
    have drawn us to the dance
    and wryly noted that our lives
    are like a failed romance...
    | Posted on 2014-05-26 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]


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