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    dots Submission Name: Bury Me Alivedots
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    Author: Crestfallenman
    ASL Info:    24/M/CA
    Elite Ratio:    4.45 - 621/961/451
    Words: 159
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsBury Me Alivedots
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    The redundancy to shed these tears,
    They can not drowned the sadness within.

    The nightmare I lived these past years,
    Buries me in dark revelry of mortal sin...

    In the waking of recovery I fumble pace,
    Trying to survive these unrequited feelings.

    Absolving the void in this empty place,
    The loss you gave for my love now bleeding...

    I am dying within the nightmare you left me,
    I wanted love but in return I get bereavement.

    Now it's getting harder to breath,
    I'm suffocating in the realities of confinement...

    My love buried alive...
    Wishing I had more than this time...

    I wish I could say I was alright,
    I wish everything was fine...

    But to the bitters of this listless winter,
    The whip-lashing realities on earth...

    Affliction turns affection to splinters,
    Depriving myself, degrading my self-worth...
    Your care was never enough? Fuck you!!!

    My love has never been enough...




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      seems like a cycle. maybe find someone who doesn't seem to fit the same. something unnatural at first. not being appreciated hurts. getting hate when we give love hurts. but you end it on hatred. self-hatred sadly enough. look at it as a cycle. patiently as you can. when you aren't moved by these emotions. and see if the cycle can be bent. it takes time, but it can. move on if you can. move past. that's my advice.
    | Posted on 2014-05-28 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]
      I want to leave thoughts but they are escaping me. I will circle back to this...I will!
    | Posted on 2014-05-28 00:00:00 | by clay | [ Reply to This ]


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