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    dots Submission Name: A big what ifdots
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    Author: jeniecel
    ASL Info:    28/f/philippines
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 313/373/169
    Words: 132
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 692
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       Just a thought


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    dotsA big what ifdots
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    what if
    we can take the world
    with all its colors
    in a paper
    the words will choose us
    would it be nice
    we don't even have to think
    we only need to believe
    believe
    the words will come
    with its own redemption
    for years being stuck in one's mind
    taken to the bones of the nameless, faceless
    ones who lack faith
    So, what if
    the words pass by
    will you take it?

    what if

    so I was a fool
    they say
    I am
    but a flick of the imagination
    the weird writer
    who was never known
    so as I stand from where I sit
    where the words have chosen me
    the warmth of the chair remain
    full of what ifs
    and

    a little bit of faith




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    ||| Comments |||
      uplifting work here. i think alot of us could do good from reading this.
    | Posted on 2014-06-06 00:00:00 | by RyanJoseph | [ Reply to This ]
      Drawn from a cup and a drop of blood from a cross.
    | Posted on 2014-05-29 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]
      Drawn from a cup and a drop of blood from a cross.
    | Posted on 2014-05-29 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]
      what if
    we can take the world
    with all its colors
    in a paper
    the words will choose us
    would it be nice
    we don't even have to think
    we only need to believe

    Fantastic beginning, very strong and deep. Keep on posting, this site is slowly becoming nothing.
    But maybe it can come alive again with a little bit of faith, lol.


    Kase
    | Posted on 2014-05-29 00:00:00 | by kase | [ Reply to This ]


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