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    dots Submission Name: A Taste Of Chaosdots
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    Author: kase
    ASL Info:    27, Winnipeg
    Elite Ratio:    2.45 - 169/398/234
    Words: 72
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsA Taste Of Chaosdots
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    "Straight up? Or with flare?"
    "Straight up? Or with flare?"
    He asked me how i wanted to die.
    I said i didn't care.

    "In the face? Or chest?"
    "In the face? Or chest?"
    He asked me where i should get shot.
    I said whatever's best.

    "In the ditch or desert."
    "Depending on the weather."
    "I'll bury him deep within the ground."
    "In my girlfriend's room his wallet was found."




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    ||| Comments |||
      it's a good like frustration releaser. this doesn't read like chaos though. reads like anger. clear focused anger.it still alludes to chaos though. which can be a good thing. i mean letting it out. maybe try making it like a convo in poetry thing. different nameless charactors to build up a story. it is quite interesting. i'll give you that. very good too. gave me chills.
    | Posted on 2014-06-06 00:00:00 | by RyanJoseph | [ Reply to This ]
      Kinda bewildering to me but at the same time unique in it's own sense.
    | Posted on 2014-06-02 00:00:00 | by Ramneet | [ Reply to This ]
      I absolutely love this!!
    | Posted on 2014-06-01 00:00:00 | by SetmyselfonFire | [ Reply to This ]
      oh crap lol
    | Posted on 2014-05-30 00:00:00 | by Teofila | [ Reply to This ]
      How will I laugh tomorrow when I can't even smile today?
    | Posted on 2014-05-30 00:00:00 | by MEGASWELL | [ Reply to This ]
      Ticking?
    | Posted on 2014-05-29 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]


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