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    dots Submission Name: Luciferdots
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    Author: Esophagus1
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 231/279/149
    Words: 83
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsLuciferdots
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    Restrained by the chains of fate
    all actions become hard to make.

    The moons spirit was broken
    and we lifted it back to the sky.

    We had spoken to the ocean,
    but it's eyes had given us lies.

    Everything was broken so we accepted the token.
    We just didn't go ahead and die.

    There's some monster in the basement so
    I think I'll get em' right.
    So, baby, gather up them kitchen knives
    and we'll bring to them light.




    Submitted on 2014-05-31 01:32:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hmm. i like this. it isn't all doom and gloom. sympathy for the devilish in the syntax.
    | Posted on 2014-05-31 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]


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