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    dots Submission Name: Lost Lovedots

    Author: jjd
    ASL Info:    20/male/Griffin, Ga.
    Elite Ratio:    2.18 - 20/78/34
    Words: 282
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       This is about my Ex Fiancee and I.
    This is a woman I bowed down, loved with everything, and she still turned away.

    I've never been in so much pain, I wish she could feel the way I do.

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    dotsLost Lovedots

    The Pain is so great, I wish you could see, I wish we could be everything that we said we will be.

    My heart is tender and fragile, You've ripped it all away. You tore it all apart when I gave it all to you. Bleeding on the outside can't replace the pain on the inside. You took me to a new kinda pain.

    I thought you was my all, my everything, but I guess I was wrong. I feel like there's nothing to live for anymore. Everything I had is nevermore.


    I saw us growing old, having beautiful children.
    all I can see now is tears that you've caused.
    shacking me around, playing with my heart.
    the pain is so great, I'd rather die than keep feeling this way.

    You made me like this. you did this to me.
    my heart is forever broken, and one can fix it. but it will never be fixed because you wish to walk away.
    I've begged, I've pleaded, I'm surrendered all. I've changed everything about myself for you. but you still turn away.
    Why was I fool thinking it could be true.
    Thinking that I could have you back.

    I just sit here in my tears, in a wonderful pit of sorrow. I can't get back out, you've put me into deep.

    You've might as well kill me because thats the way you make me feel.

    I wish you could feel the way I do.
    Then maybe you can see that it was true, my love for you.

    Submitted on 2014-06-02 08:33:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      J..I see you have a broken heart and you are struggling to make right from wrong and find someone to listen?

    This is pure heart...it reads that way...there are a few thing that if changed it would read better so if you'd like I'll come back and help with that.

    For now...I have read...I now see where some of your pain comes from but I can only be an ear...give advice if you want it...ya know.

    What I am trying to say if you want help...I'm around. Either on your poetry or troubles. Send a pm if you wish.

    Peace is always with you...never stop seeking it...serio so. Seriously

    | Posted on 2014-06-02 00:00:00 | by clay | [ Reply to This ]

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