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Dance with Life

Author: love gone wrong
ASL Info:    27/m/colorado
Elite Ratio:    2.14 - 337 /381 /42
Words: 116
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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i have no idea...please comment and crticize

Dance with Life

spiritually wandering
emphatically searching
life's great questions
voyaging soulless through time and space
hurting spirit, aging face
emotionally drawn, wrinkled by time
feelings of love now quiet; sublime
a fallacy devised
by wanton, lying eyes
buried deep in rotting soil
more truth than love it seems
horrific, earbursting screams
tortured souls surround
enveloping all that was found
quenching knowlede with anxiety once more
devouring spirit, mind and core
feasting ceases, now it's done
nothing left but moon and sun
for they are infinite, they are one
float in the cosmic path between
bask in their energy, feel the unseen
the only way to find the answer....
embrace love and pain; waltz with the dancer

Submitted on 2004-02-16 15:58:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is nice, it flows, and it makes me feel like I'm being lifted onto a cloud.
| Posted on 2004-02-17 00:00:00 | by Cai | [ Reply to This ]

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