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    dots Submission Name: Real poetrydots
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    Author: SetmyselfonFire
    Elite Ratio:    2.83 - 41/55/47
    Words: 155
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    Shake my head at this cliché shit
    hit me hard and please dont miss
    I want your wrist to ache as much your heart
    I want you to reminisce,
    open up and fall apart
    wander back,
    cause the past is art.

    Im always a little bit broken
    a little bit torn, a little bit sore from rejection
    this hopelessness feels like a thorn
    Yet we'd do it all over again
    Put ourselves on display, projection
    for a little perfection
    for a little affection....

    Just point me in the right direction
    in the meantime, Ive built a collection
    of composition books
    full of words by selection
    thats where you'll find my honesty
    where I'll always be sincere
    If there happens to be a loss of words
    I'm sure I filled that page with tears
    turn the page and you'll find my biggest fears
    because this is real poetry here.




    Submitted on 2014-06-06 15:44:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Flowed good overall only thing missing is "as" in between much and your in the third line
    | Posted on 2014-06-20 00:00:00 | by kase | [ Reply to This ]


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