Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Wouldn't You Like To Knowdots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: DearlyDeparted
    Elite Ratio:    3.33 - 211/290/189
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 762
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 827



    Description:
       Off the grid.. on the grid.. now you see me.. now you don't..


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsWouldn't You Like To Knowdots
    -------------------------------------------


    You could say that I'm not okay..
    With putting it all out on display.
    Leaving nothing to find;
    Only inhibits the mind.
    Allowing others to disconnect,
    Through internet connections..
    And they wonder why..
    I hide tucked behind..
    All the bickering, uninteresting information, over sharing, and trivial likability.
    Because I feel that if you care,
    You'll rip out those wires and come outside to share.
    Disengage to reconnect those roots with something that will last.
    Like that of the feeling of your bare feet in the wet dew soaked grass.
    True interaction;
    that causes a chain reaction..
    Called memories.
    Ones that can mend the past..
    Those that you won't need pictures and statuses to makes last.




    Submitted on 2014-06-06 19:27:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    199123

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Trails written by Daniel Barlow
    The Song on Your Guitar written by SavedDragon
    Hopelessly Blind written by ForgottenGraves
    I will call out your name written by RisingSon
    Our Cinder Crisis written by SavedDragon
    Pressure written by hybridsongwrite
    Summer Nights written by ollie_wicked
    In My Head written by faideddarkness
    Wish written by Daniel Barlow
    Wasps written by Wolfwatching
    Wavelength written by saartha
    Ten Poems written by Wolfwatching
    Be Free written by hybridsongwrite
    new moon written by CrypticBard
    Love Can Be... written by HAVENSMITH92
    Treasure Chest written by PieceOfCake
    Push written by JanePlane
    A Sonnet for Nina written by SavedDragon
    Skin of Fables written by ShadowParadox
    Bond written by saartha
    Devils in the Details written by endlessgame23
    Hollow Points written by RequiemOfDreams
    Munyonyo written by expiring_touch
    Sunset written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Song written by Daniel Barlow
    Transparent written by Daniel Barlow
    To written by SavedDragon
    Life changes in a moment written by Ramneet
    You Make Me speechless written by elephantasia
    In the Mouth of Elysium written by HisNameIsNoMore

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry