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    dots Submission Name: Egoistadots
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    Author: MyPeriodical
    ASL Info:    18/m/pr
    Elite Ratio:    4.32 - 288/229/264
    Words: 76
    Class/Type: Poetry/Romance
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    dotsEgoistadots
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    Quitarme de la ropa que me habías puesto esta mañana;
    pienso en tu rostro mientras que te hacía ver estrellas.

    Me embocas en tu calor,
    sin ti no sé como sentirlo.
    Me retas, y me pongo de frente.
    Te veleo,
    sólo para irme.

    Prestarme tus pestañas para protegerme de la lluvia;
    a ti te uso para entonces pintarte
    con mi aroma de playa y cultura.




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